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Re: A new pirate ship.
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lugnet.pirates
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Date:
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Thu, 6 Jan 2000 22:19:19 GMT
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In lugnet.pirates, Timothy D. Freshly writes:
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> Richard Parsons <rparsons@hinet.net.au> wrote in message
> news:FnwvCu.Hx7@lugnet.com...
> > Gentlemen,
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> > With all this Captain John E. Doolittle stuff (and that's not over - go
> > http://www.hinet.net.au/~guinan/doo.htm and see where its up to and make
> > your mark), I find myself hankering for a decent pirate ship.
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> Richard:
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> This is a marvelous little piece of storytelling. You've done a great job
> of weaving the story lines developed here in lugnet.pirates and meshing them
> into a very clever story.
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> If you will allow one criticism (in the editorial sense only). In the
> paragraphs preceding the one which begins "And these weren't all his
> problems...", you were talking about the widower Waite, Doolittle's former
> law partner. However, in this paragraph, you appear to switch back to
> Doolittle without using a proper noun to indicate a switch - "his" still is
> linked to Waite even though I think you mean Doolittle. I had to read it
> twice because the first time through, I thought that you were still speaking
> about Waite.
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> If I am reading this incorrectly, please feel free to throw a third grade
> grammer book at me. Again, an excellent story. Keep up the good work.
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> Tim
I feel off my chair laughing about sailing with Impunity! It was a great
amalgam of the ideas bandied about here.
Bruce
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| Richard Parsons <rparsons@hinet.net.au> wrote in message news:FnwvCu.Hx7@lugnet.com... (...) Richard: This is a marvelous little piece of storytelling. You've done a great job of weaving the story lines developed here in lugnet.pirates and meshing (...) (24 years ago, 6-Jan-00, to lugnet.pirates)
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