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Re: A new pirate ship.
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lugnet.pirates
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Thu, 6 Jan 2000 21:40:24 GMT
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Richard Parsons <rparsons@hinet.net.au> wrote in message
news:FnwvCu.Hx7@lugnet.com...
> Gentlemen,
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> With all this Captain John E. Doolittle stuff (and that's not over - go
> http://www.hinet.net.au/~guinan/doo.htm and see where its up to and make
> your mark), I find myself hankering for a decent pirate ship.
Richard:
This is a marvelous little piece of storytelling. You've done a great job
of weaving the story lines developed here in lugnet.pirates and meshing them
into a very clever story.
If you will allow one criticism (in the editorial sense only). In the
paragraphs preceding the one which begins "And these weren't all his
problems...", you were talking about the widower Waite, Doolittle's former
law partner. However, in this paragraph, you appear to switch back to
Doolittle without using a proper noun to indicate a switch - "his" still is
linked to Waite even though I think you mean Doolittle. I had to read it
twice because the first time through, I thought that you were still speaking
about Waite.
If I am reading this incorrectly, please feel free to throw a third grade
grammer book at me. Again, an excellent story. Keep up the good work.
Tim
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Message has 2 Replies:
 | | Re: A new pirate ship.
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| (...) I feel off my chair laughing about sailing with Impunity! It was a great amalgam of the ideas bandied about here. Bruce (24 years ago, 6-Jan-00, to lugnet.pirates)
| | | Re: John E. Doolittle.
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| Timothy D. Freshly wrote in message ... (...) paragraphs preceding the one which begins "And these weren't all his problems...", you were talking about the widower Waite, Doolittle's former law partner. However, in this paragraph, you appear to (...) (24 years ago, 6-Jan-00, to lugnet.pirates)
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| | A new pirate ship.
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| Gentlemen, With all this Captain John E. Doolittle stuff (and that's not over - go (URL) and see where its up to and make your mark), I find myself hankering for a decent pirate ship. Not one of these RR or AF builds - I mean like the Agamemnon (...) (24 years ago, 6-Jan-00, to lugnet.pirates)
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