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In lugnet.castle, Mark Jordan writes:
> Hi Matt,
> The new version is much clearer.
> A few of suggestions for you:
> - you are definitely a writer. The fact that you keep coming back to it,
> after so many blunt criticisms, proves this.
> - you need to perfect your grammar and word selection. If you have the
> slightest doubt about how a word is used, use a simpler word. Suggest you
> get a dictionary which includes quotations in it - such as the Oxford.
> - (with all due respect to the others on Lugnet) consider doing a creative
> writing class, where your aspirations as a writer would be more appreciated
> and gently critiqued.
> All the best, Mark
Hmm...reading some of the earlier dialogue from the
predecessor chapters, I could easily tell I didn't
place much incentive to further read within the
dialogue. What was I thinking?
I'll continue to refine it until something works.
Thanks for the commentary. (as you can tell already,
I take criticism well. Just a tolerant person,
I'm guessing... :)
<<_Matt Hein_>>
Fellow lego enthusiast
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| Hi Matt, (...) The new version is much clearer. A few of suggestions for you: - you are definitely a writer. The fact that you keep coming back to it, after so many blunt criticisms, proves this. - you need to perfect your grammar and word (...) (22 years ago, 20-Dec-02, to lugnet.castle, lugnet.general)
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