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Matt,
Your mis-use of long words is too frequent to catalogue. If you honestly knew
what they meant, why mis-use them?
If you plan to use long words, I suggest you check each and every one with a
dictionary - preferably one that has quotations from other works of literature.
Also, as an exercise, I suggest you read some Hemingway. He manages to get a
lot meaning into a few words. As another exercise, why not try writing one
chapter without the use of adverbs, adjectives, or complex words. Imagine you
are writing for kids....
regards, Mark
In lugnet.castle, Matt Hein writes:
> In lugnet.castle, Kevin Wilson writes:
> > No, I didn't get bored, to be honest I got really
> > really irritated with all the big words thrown in
> > without apparently knowing what they mean. It gets
> > in the way of the communication.
>
> I can honestly say I knew what they meant, just
> improperly used some of them in the dialogue.
> (Several of the uses were largely inappropriate
> as pointed out earlier. I'm still reviewing for
> phrases to edit out.)
> My apologies if this served as an interference
> to communication. I'm just wordy at times. :)
>
> > I just went back and took another look, and I
> > see you've done a lot of editing. Major improvement!
>
> Thanks, it's good to know that I'm at least
> headed in the right direction in the
> communications department. Now, what scene
> to fix next? (probably the battle scene.)
>
> <<_Matt Hein_>>
> Fellow lego enthusiast
> O s p r e y
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| (...) Nice question. Let's get down to the specifics. 1. I wrote the original manuscript for this story over two years ago. Have you taken a second look at the writing yet? (you'll notice I really toned down a lot of the words in part three.) 2. I (...) (22 years ago, 24-Dec-02, to lugnet.castle, lugnet.general)
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