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Re: My first attempt at a story. The Forest of Blood part 1.
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Mon, 15 Jan 2001 19:53:06 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, Joel Jacobsen writes:
> http://home.columbus.rr.com/jacobsen/html/Castle/Fob-main.htm
Suh-weet!!
That story really gave me the chills... whoa... very cool. I lke the whole
Forest of Blood idea, the flowers blooming where soldiers have died... and
what *was* that shadow? <shiver>
Can't wait to see the rest...
> This is actually an experiment of sorts - one that I could use feedback on.
Alright, feedback? Hmm. You might want to check tenses - this is something I
have repeatedly had problems with. Stick with past tense or present tense;
careful with your wording. Printing out the story and reading it to yourself
helps sometimes...
> When I started out, it certainly seemed like a good idea, but I did not
> realize just how difficult it would be to find background photos of just
> exactly what I wanted. I have enough to complete the remaining two episodes
> of the story, but beyond that - should I keep it up as stories dictate or
> let this end as something better off left to the pro's? :)
Pros, shmoes. No such thing as "pros"! Everyone starts somewhere. And you
have some really great ideas there! Don't keep us in suspense, Joel!!
-Shiri
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| After claiming for the better part of a year to get involved and share something I've done, I have finally can. :) While it's not really a MOC, it's the beginning of a story that provides some background and introduction to the realm I intend to (...) (24 years ago, 15-Jan-01, to lugnet.castle)
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