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Re: Chapter 2, plus 2 MOCs, too
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Mon, 7 Apr 2003 20:15:13 GMT
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Hi,
> You were right when you said you would be very honest, but I appreciate every
> word.
I forgot a few positive mentions, which make my comments a little harsh
in hindsight. (When I put up my story and you say something negative and I
complain feel free to link to this post : ) )
> I regret to hear that my plot thus far and my writing have disappointed
> you.
First off I forgot to mention... Aside from LOTR and your and Matt's
books (if his are considered fantasy) I don't read fantasy. That leaves you
and Matt a pretty hard act to follow. So keep in mind when I point stuff out
I'm comparing with the best (LOTR) and not some crummy paperback.
> I will certainly try harder in the future to keep my level of writing
> higher.
I also forgot to mention that aside from the last 5 chapters and the
first 2 of this new book you were steadily improving. Also my view on you
first two chapters is bias because I (not everyone) prefer stories to start
with an undeveloped character who then gains friends...
> As for the plot I can only hope that you will enjoy what I have in
> store, as you say I have a talent for plot twists. Like I said in a previous
> post, however, this story will be less dependant, overall, on magic to solve
> situations, hopefully that will be more to your liking. Please don't think
> that I've changed the story just to appease my audience, the story has not
> changed since I wrote it.
I am sure I will enjoy it!
> I agree with you about the rushed feeling the last
> five chapters have, but I kind of wrote myself in a corner on that one. I >was
> forced to finish the plot elements in the chapter markers I gave myself.
> If/When I get around to finally finishing turning the Chronicles into a book
> form I'll be sure to slow it down.
I'll get a copy...
> I had never thought of myself working in a new area of writing before. A >style
> of adult picture books, huh? That's a pretty cool thought.
I rank all the stories layed out like yours on Lugnet as a new concept
(building, within pictures, replacing description...)
> And thank you for your compliments to me and my story. It does my heart good
> to know that there are those who like my story just as much as those who >don't
> I also want to thank you for your honesty. Things like this really help me
> become a better writer and entertainer.
Well It shows a lot of class that you can take a comment like mine in
your stride (in my -17 hour jet lag I was in no condition to softly phrase...)
But to prove how much I enjoyed your story I will restate here my
encore requests:
-I would love a whole book or at least a couple illustrated pages of
the beginning of your world (based on the intro to your first book)
-I also think the jackels deserve a book (or short story).
God Bless,
And thanks for taking my rant so well!
Nathan
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| (...) Ah, yes...and I'm still drafting that act. Actually, right now I have a whole notebook filled with pictures, theories and potential plot twists just ready to break out. However, I have a very clear idea of where I want to branch off. For (...) (22 years ago, 8-Apr-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| (...) I'm not much of a reader (go figure), so I've never read that quote of his before. Thank you for sharing it. I can always seem to count on the support of my lugnet friends whenever I am in need. (...) You were right when you said you would be (...) (22 years ago, 6-Apr-03, to lugnet.castle)
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