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Re: Erik leaves home
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Sun, 13 Feb 2000 18:39:49 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, James Howse writes:
> Caution fiction following....
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> Erik Leaves Home.
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> A small start to The Saga of Erik and an first essay at fiction writing.
> Please LMKWYT, thanks
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> James from Oz
Very well written! You did a great job of creating pictures in the mind of the
reader - tremendous use of the english language without redundancy. I can still
see the cliff-side beach scene in my head, with all the emotion of wanting to
leave and reconciling the fact that the far away time had actually come.
Excellent job.
My only criticism is all the name dropping without expounding on who or what
exactly is being talked about. I think there were two or three times where you
mentioned a person or place without clarifying who/what they are. Minor point,
please don't be offended.
"I'm NOT PLAYING, I'm CREATING"
Bill
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| (...) I've found that I have the same problem when writing up one small facet of a detailed backstory. If I put in enough detail to make the references and interrelationships clear, I drift too far away from the immediate purpose of the writing (the (...) (25 years ago, 15-Feb-00, to lugnet.castle)
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| Caution fiction following.... Eirk Leaves Home. Erik hefted his pack into the small boat. Feeling the wind snap around him he turned back to look at the small town and the tower beyond. Now that it was time to go he was not sure he wanted to. It was (...) (25 years ago, 13-Feb-00, to lugnet.castle)
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