 | | FINALLY! I started on my story! —Joey Finnell
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| | | Hi all, I finally got off my butt, and got something finished, ok well I know it needs more writing but hey at least I got something done :-P so here it is, I'm on a roll, more soon to come (URL) click quest and by all means, LMKWYT laterz Joey (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | | | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story! —Alex Polimeni
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| | | | | (...) Hey, pretty good job, Joey! The cyclops is rather strange, i admit...more good Figbashing, though! Unless it is your writing style, though, here is a comment about the writing: writing things as if they happened is better than if they are (...) (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | | | | | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story! —Adrian Drake
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| | | | | | | (...) Most fiction is written in past tense, yes. Though choosing between one and the other is a personal choice. However, you should stick to one of them. I noticed your story switches from past tense to present half way through, and then switches (...) (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | | | | | | | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story! —Joey Finnell
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| | | | | | | | As I said in the post to Alex I'm not the best writer, I need to work on that part for sure, I appriciate the advice. Thanx P.S. The next part is coming soon. Laterz (...) (22 years ago, 11-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | | | | | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story! —Joey Finnell
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| | | | | | I really only did this to goof off, but I liked how it turned out, so I decided to keep it, I was never really good at writing, I myself know that the writing needs works, but do you think it should be more detailed? or should I leave it short and (...) (22 years ago, 11-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | | | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story! —Nick Oranzi
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| | | | | (...) The story seems intriguing, mysterious. The characters and the dialog seem natural and the events ask many questions which i assume will be answered in time. Your cut off leaves me interested, not quite the whole event so you better finish the (...) (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | | | | | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story! —Joey Finnell
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| | | | | | I used a webcam to take the pix, its the only thing I had at the moment I'm not sure if I'll get any better quality pix, because my digital cam eats thru batteries, and the stupid wall adapter is broken on it, so if I dont use the webcam I'm (...) (22 years ago, 11-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | | | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story! —Leonard Hoffman
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| | | | Joey.. this is a pretty good start to your story. Several pieces of advice: 1. proof read it seems you've got a lot of problems with contractions. For instance you use "its" when it should be "it's" (or "it is").. similiar with 'your' v. you're (you (...) (22 years ago, 13-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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