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FINALLY! I started on my story!
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lugnet.castle
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Mon, 10 Mar 2003 14:43:20 GMT
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Hi all,
I finally got off my butt, and got something finished, ok well I know it
needs more writing but hey at least I got something done :-P so here it is,
I'm on
a roll, more soon to come
http://www.angelfire.com/wizard/of_the_ages/Story.html
just click quest
and by all means, LMKWYT
laterz
Joey
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Message has 3 Replies:
 | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story!
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| (...) Hey, pretty good job, Joey! The cyclops is rather strange, i admit...more good Figbashing, though! Unless it is your writing style, though, here is a comment about the writing: writing things as if they happened is better than if they are (...) (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
| | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story!
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| (...) The story seems intriguing, mysterious. The characters and the dialog seem natural and the events ask many questions which i assume will be answered in time. Your cut off leaves me interested, not quite the whole event so you better finish the (...) (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
| | | Re: FINALLY! I started on my story!
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| Joey.. this is a pretty good start to your story. Several pieces of advice: 1. proof read it seems you've got a lot of problems with contractions. For instance you use "its" when it should be "it's" (or "it is").. similiar with 'your' v. you're (you (...) (22 years ago, 13-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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