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Re: FINALLY! I started on my story!
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Mon, 10 Mar 2003 15:51:43 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, Alex Polimeni writes:
> In lugnet.castle, Joey Finnell writes:
> > Hi all,
> >
> > I finally got off my butt, and got something finished, ok well I know it
> > needs more writing but hey at least I got something done :-P so here it is,
> > I'm on
> > a roll, more soon to come
> >
> > http://www.angelfire.com/wizard/of_the_ages/Story.html
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> > just click quest
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> > and by all means, LMKWYT
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> > laterz
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> > Joey
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> Hey, pretty good job, Joey!
> The cyclops is rather strange, i admit...more good Figbashing, though!
> Unless it is your writing style, though, here is a comment about the writing:
> writing things as if they happened is better than if they are happening. such
> as: He turns the key. Instead, that might sound better as: He turned the key.
> Thats just my opinion, though :)
> Well, its good so far!
> I cant wait for the next chapter
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> Eaten alive by a LEGO brick,
> Aramir
Most fiction is written in past tense, yes. Though choosing between one and
the other is a personal choice. However, you should stick to one of them. I
noticed your story switches from past tense to present half way through, and
then switches back to past at the end, which is a little odd. Was that
purposeful?
I wouldn't say that writing in past tense is "better", per se, but it is much
more common, and as such, our brains are usually tuned to interpret present
tense as weird.
Keep creating, you're off to a fine start.
Adrian
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http://www.brickfrenzy.com
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| As I said in the post to Alex I'm not the best writer, I need to work on that part for sure, I appriciate the advice. Thanx P.S. The next part is coming soon. Laterz (...) (22 years ago, 11-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| (...) Hey, pretty good job, Joey! The cyclops is rather strange, i admit...more good Figbashing, though! Unless it is your writing style, though, here is a comment about the writing: writing things as if they happened is better than if they are (...) (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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