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Re: FINALLY! I started on my story!
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lugnet.castle
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Tue, 11 Mar 2003 11:04:53 GMT
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I really only did this to goof off, but I liked how it turned out, so I
decided to keep it, I was never really good at writing, I myself know that
the writing needs works, but do you think it should be more detailed? or
should I leave it short and sweet so to speak?
Joey
In lugnet.castle, Alex Polimeni writes:
> In lugnet.castle, Joey Finnell writes:
> > Hi all,
> >
> > I finally got off my butt, and got something finished, ok well I know it
> > needs more writing but hey at least I got something done :-P so here it is,
> > I'm on
> > a roll, more soon to come
> >
> > http://www.angelfire.com/wizard/of_the_ages/Story.html
> >
> > just click quest
> >
> > and by all means, LMKWYT
> >
> > laterz
> >
> > Joey
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> Hey, pretty good job, Joey!
> The cyclops is rather strange, i admit...more good Figbashing, though!
> Unless it is your writing style, though, here is a comment about the writing:
> writing things as if they happened is better than if they are happening. such
> as: He turns the key. Instead, that might sound better as: He turned the key.
> Thats just my opinion, though :)
> Well, its good so far!
> I cant wait for the next chapter
>
> Eaten alive by a LEGO brick,
> Aramir
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| (...) Hey, pretty good job, Joey! The cyclops is rather strange, i admit...more good Figbashing, though! Unless it is your writing style, though, here is a comment about the writing: writing things as if they happened is better than if they are (...) (24 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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