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Re: FINALLY! I started on my story!
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Mon, 10 Mar 2003 14:58:32 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, Joey Finnell writes:
> Hi all,
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> I finally got off my butt, and got something finished, ok well I know it
> needs more writing but hey at least I got something done :-P so here it is,
> I'm on
> a roll, more soon to come
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> http://www.angelfire.com/wizard/of_the_ages/Story.html
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> just click quest
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> and by all means, LMKWYT
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> laterz
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> Joey
Hey, pretty good job, Joey!
The cyclops is rather strange, i admit...more good Figbashing, though!
Unless it is your writing style, though, here is a comment about the writing:
writing things as if they happened is better than if they are happening. such
as: He turns the key. Instead, that might sound better as: He turned the key.
Thats just my opinion, though :)
Well, its good so far!
I cant wait for the next chapter
Eaten alive by a LEGO brick,
Aramir
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| (...) Most fiction is written in past tense, yes. Though choosing between one and the other is a personal choice. However, you should stick to one of them. I noticed your story switches from past tense to present half way through, and then switches (...) (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| I really only did this to goof off, but I liked how it turned out, so I decided to keep it, I was never really good at writing, I myself know that the writing needs works, but do you think it should be more detailed? or should I leave it short and (...) (22 years ago, 11-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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| | FINALLY! I started on my story!
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| Hi all, I finally got off my butt, and got something finished, ok well I know it needs more writing but hey at least I got something done :-P so here it is, I'm on a roll, more soon to come (URL) click quest and by all means, LMKWYT laterz Joey (22 years ago, 10-Mar-03, to lugnet.castle)
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