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Re: Epic of the Beyhadur: Completion
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lugnet.castle
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Thu, 20 Feb 2003 22:51:12 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, William Movish writes:
> Lenny,
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> I finally got to finish reading the Beyhadur Epic. It was marvellously
> done! There was an excellent tone to the writing; it really captured the
> feel of an ancient historical/religious text.
thanks!
> I also have to say I really liked the battle sequences. The fight in the
> street looked like a terribly confused melee. Much different than the Olman
> warriors charging down the hill to ambush the Lonsons.
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> My only real bit of criticism, which is relatively minor, is the placement
> of the text. I tended to read top to bottom, so I would often read the word
> balloons in the picture before the text block at the bottom which was
> intended to precede it. When a text block ended in an ellipsis, I always
> expected it to lead into the next frame, rather than refer back to the
> picture above.
Yeah, I realized that while making the first part.. but couldn't immeadiately
figured out a solution without having to re-write the whole thing. My next
project will eliminate the problem.
Thanks for the feedback!
_lenny
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| Lenny, I finally got to finish reading the Beyhadur Epic. It was marvellously done! There was an excellent tone to the writing; it really captured the feel of an ancient historical/religious text. I also have to say I really liked the battle (...) (21 years ago, 20-Feb-03, to lugnet.castle)
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