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Re: Epic of the Beyhadur: Completion
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lugnet.castle
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Thu, 20 Feb 2003 19:06:44 GMT
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Lenny,
I finally got to finish reading the Beyhadur Epic. It was marvellously
done! There was an excellent tone to the writing; it really captured the
feel of an ancient historical/religious text.
I also have to say I really liked the battle sequences. The fight in the
street looked like a terribly confused melee. Much different than the Olman
warriors charging down the hill to ambush the Lonsons.
My only real bit of criticism, which is relatively minor, is the placement
of the text. I tended to read top to bottom, so I would often read the word
balloons in the picture before the text block at the bottom which was
intended to precede it. When a text block ended in an ellipsis, I always
expected it to lead into the next frame, rather than refer back to the
picture above.
But, that aside, i really did enjoy the story. I look forward to your next
venture.
--William
The Kingdom of Gatimrja
http://home.earthlink.net/~ynpw/index.html
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| (...) thanks! (...) Yeah, I realized that while making the first part.. but couldn't immeadiately figured out a solution without having to re-write the whole thing. My next project will eliminate the problem. Thanks for the feedback! _lenny (21 years ago, 20-Feb-03, to lugnet.castle)
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