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Re: Kingdom of Gatimrja: story continues
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lugnet.castle
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Fri, 21 Jun 2002 04:19:17 GMT
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On Fri, 21 Jun 2002, Anthony Sava wrote:
> In lugnet.castle, William Movish writes:
> > Chapter I of my castle story is finished.
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> > Check it out at: http://home.earthlink.net/~ynpw/index.html
> Well done. The dialogue, I thought, was cleverly written and the action
> matched up well. I liked the facial portrates identifying the different
> speakers also.
I agree, except that the thumbnail portraits were a bit too small to
readily distinguish the speaker, especially when he was wearing a helmet.
. .
I also thought that helmet inconspicuously leaping off a head at Aemilia's
language was neat (reminded me of Peter Cross, or the like), but to scroll
down and see the effect used in multiple shots detracted from it, for me.
--
TWS Garrison
http://www.math.purdue.edu/~tgarriso/
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| (...) Well done. The dialogue, I thought, was cleverly written and the action matched up well. I liked the facial portrates identifying the different speakers also. Keep up the good work. --Anthony (URL) (23 years ago, 21-Jun-02, to lugnet.castle)
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