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Re: A cry for help !
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Wed, 16 Jul 2003 15:29:51 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, Joey Finnell wrote:
> Hi all
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> I was hoping that some of you could maybe give me a few pointers on what I
> should do to improve my poor writing skills, I feel that I need to improve
> before I go any farther in illustrating my story so any help you guys can
> give me on this subject would be greatly appriciated, thanx in advance. heres
> a sample of my writing:
Dan did a better job on the intro than I could, so here's my suggestions for the
dialogue portion...
Alan
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“Oh No........” whispered the elf in fear. He rushed to his companions to warn
them of the danger cascading down the hill.
“Victor, Eric, Mudd, Malak...” Nevfang shouted.
“What’s the matter? ” asked Victor, rising to his feet.
“...Goblins,” Nevfang stated, “At the top of the hill....”
“Well alright then” interrupted Mudd, drawing his great sword, “Let us kill some
goblins shall we? ”
Nevfang drew up short, incredulous. “Oh..... really, do you plan to take on the
entire goblin force by yourself? ”
“And what other options would you suggest?” replied Mudd, eyeing the seething
swarm of goblins.
“We haven’t got many other options...” stated Victor, following Mudd’s gaze.
“I’ll follow your lead, my brother.” said Malak bravely, fingering the hilt of
his sword.
Mudd smiled mischievously “Count me in. I do so love a challenge.”
“What say you Eric? ” asked Victor turning to his friend. The wizard had been
sitting motionless on a rock at the edge of their camp.
“Well.....”, he began, then vanished. Reappearing next to Victor, he continued
with a twinkle in his eye, “I could never leave my companions behind.”
“You humans are insane...”, Nevfang laughed. “But you have a lot of spirit...”
“Shall we then? ” asked Malak.
“Before breakfast? ” grinned Victor. “Yes, let’s work up an appetite...”
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