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In lugnet.castle.org.cw, Jesse Alan Long writes:
> In lugnet.announce, Kevin Maynes writes:
> > Anyway, you can get to it by clicking [The Wanderer] link found here;
> >
> > http://www.kmaynespaint.com/Pages/SiteStructure/Subsidiaries.html
> I like your story but I feel that the excess blood in the story is too
> reminiscent of Mortal Kombat and too many anime scenes in anime so I believe
> that if you want an equally effective scene, you should use angles in your
> work. I love the overall story but you need to use more angles instead of
> more blood. You should also try to use more of the environment in your
> fighting scenes and also try to let The Wanderer bash some people together
> instead of goring people. Most thieves, pickpockets, and other petty thugs
> understand the general idea that once they have been severely beaten that
> they will not try to destroy that person. These are merely my opinion so
> until the next issue, I have the feeling that Matchlock and company will not
> be very happy when they meet The Wanderer.
> Jesse Long
Ummmm thanks for your comments.
I may well get more dynamic with each passing issue, should they come about,
we'll have to wait and see.
Can't say much about the blood content though, what the writer says goes for
the most part. I did resist the urge to cover the ground in red though.
I would wager that The Wanderer was thinking any bandit given a severe beating
is more likely to seek revenge in the future.. death kinda.. cuts that short,
shall we say. But I'm just guessing, even I've not yet seen the next
instalment.
I imagine you're right about the meeting of Matchlock and The Wanderer making
for an interesting show.
Cheers,
KMaynes
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