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Re: unlurk- some stuff i made
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Thu, 24 Apr 2003 19:15:37 GMT
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In lugnet.space, Keith Goldman writes:
> Ok Spencer, take this with a grain of salt. I have no idea of your part
> inventory so some of my suggestions may be useless to you. I'm giving you
> the kind of feedback that I like to get, a mix of the good and the bad.
> Here goes:
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> -the ground vehicles are a little primitive, although the police apc shows
> some promise. I did like the weapon shown in the seperate pic, it rocks.
That was my 2nd most recent MOC...some improvement with practice, eh?
> Some fenders might help the police apc, maybe a spotlight & loudspeaker and
> an icon that says POLICE. As with alot of your stuff, it needs more detail.
> Miscellaneous grill pieces or hoses, or clamps that don't really do
> anything, but add to the flavor.
Yeah, I was scraping the bottom of the parts bin when i made that one,
couldnt afford to waste pieces on a fender..would have liked one though.
> The tank is in dire need of the greeblies,
> that side profile is to barren. Maybe this was your intent, if not, throw
> some random gray components on there like tools or grills or something. The
> tank gun is very good, but the turred itelf is not, i think it needs to be
> beefier. you have this massive tank, and a tiny gun housing.
Yeah, i wanted to make something to go over the tracks, and i would like
some scopes or vents, too. The turret, well, that was originally intended
for an APC of some sort. Kind of evolved into a tank :(
> Do not take this as a blind shelling, your stuff shows great promise, you >just need to define. Rebuilding in my experience always helps. The mech... >i like that it is spindly, but I hope it is not a combat model. If so, the >pilot is a dead-man walking...er..riding. The arms pretty much blow, and >once again,ditch the star wars cannons as cannons. Use them as legs, or >something that they are not intended to be. Bottom line, the mech didn't do >much for me.
Me neither :) I originally had something much larger planned, but as usual,
i lost control and ended up with a gawky looking lil' biped. We'll see its
big bro in my next post...
As for the SW cannons, theres not much i can do. Virtually all of my
collection comes from SW fighters, and thats all i have. Ive been looking
around lugnet for alternate weapon designs, but so far none look simple
enough for me :(
> The artillery piece is interesting, but doesn't look finished. I know this
> is vague, but I would look at some real-world artillery and re-visit your
> design.
That was another throw together, something for the 4 wheel drive thing to
haul around. I do want to see some real world artillery. Do you know any
good sites?
> -the space/air-craft are on the whole, much better. The ground attack ship
> is my favorite of your creations, and I wouldn't change too much there. The
> engines are cool, as are the rocket pods, and the tail design is my favorite
> feature. What I would change is the 'star wars' cannons. You rely way too
> heavily on these peices, and judging by your police apc gun and your tank
> cannon, you are capable of much better work. Use those straight rods with
> technic pins over them, or modified antennas, but use something besides the
> pre-made star wars gun unless you are specifically making something for that
> universe. My next favorie was the x-plane vtol ship is also very good, but
> I think it would look better with landing gear. Use the gray skis, or
> desgin your own, but it needs some clearance from the ground. I don't like
> the prop-driven vtol ship. It looks like you didn't put the same effort
> into it as the others. The props are more like screws on a ship, and not
> well suited to that kind of craft.
yup. The guns are a big prob...and the prop VTOL was basically a way to get
more pieces used up. I plan on busting that up the minute i nget my b-link
order and putting the parts back in circulation.
> -the town... I don't want to sound like an a-hole, but I wasn't moved. You
> can do better than stock buildings like the police station. Your own design
> will alway, ALWAYS be better than legos. I did like the gun/bunker emplacement.
I know the town sux. Im not offended, dont worry. I just had the stuff
built, so i basically threw it together as a backdrop for my bunker.
> So there is your honest feedback. I hope it was helpfull. If you take
> anything away from this, let it be positive. Your work shows great promise,
> and you should keep at it. It is better than alot of stuff out ther.
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> Cheers, and keep building...
> -Keith
Thanks. Constructive criticism ROCKS!
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