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Re: unlurk- some stuff i made
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Thu, 24 Apr 2003 04:18:41 GMT
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In lugnet.space, Spencer Nowak writes:
> In lugnet.announce.moc, Spencer Nowak writes:
> > http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=40749
> > http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=40747
> > http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=40746
> Come on!!! I want to know what y'all think!! Go ahead and criticize them, i
> wont cry. I want feedback, and i could care less if it is positive or
> negative!!
Ok Spencer, take this with a grain of salt. I have no idea of your part
inventory so some of my suggestions may be useless to you. I'm giving you
the kind of feedback that I like to get, a mix of the good and the bad.
Here goes:
-the ground vehicles are a little primitive, although the police apc shows
some promise. I did like the weapon shown in the seperate pic, it rocks.
Some fenders might help the police apc, maybe a spotlight & loudspeaker and
an icon that says POLICE. As with alot of your stuff, it needs more detail.
Miscellaneous grill pieces or hoses, or clamps that don't really do
anything, but add to the flavor. The tank is in dire need of the greeblies,
that side profile is to barren. Maybe this was your intent, if not, throw
some random gray components on there like tools or grills or something. The
tank gun is very good, but the turred itelf is not, i think it needs to be
beefier. you have this massive tank, and a tiny gun housing. Do not take
this as a blind shelling, your stuff shows great promise, you just need to
refine. Rebuilding in my experience always helps. The mech... i like that
it is spindly, but I hope it is not a combat model. If so, the pilot is a
dead-man walking...er..riding. The arms pretty much blow, and once again,
ditch the star wars cannons as cannons. Use them as legs, or something that
they are not intended to be. Bottom line, the mech didn't do much for me.
The artillery piece is interesting, but doesn't look finished. I know this
is vague, but I would look at some real-world artillery and re-visit your
design.
-the space/air-craft are on the whole, much better. The ground attack ship
is my favorite of your creations, and I wouldn't change too much there. The
engines are cool, as are the rocket pods, and the tail design is my favorite
feature. What I would change is the 'star wars' cannons. You rely way too
heavily on these peices, and judging by your police apc gun and your tank
cannon, you are capable of much better work. Use those straight rods with
technic pins over them, or modified antennas, but use something besides the
pre-made star wars gun unless you are specifically making something for that
universe. My next favorie was the x-plane vtol ship is also very good, but
I think it would look better with landing gear. Use the gray skis, or
desgin your own, but it needs some clearance from the ground. I don't like
the prop-driven vtol ship. It looks like you didn't put the same effort
into it as the others. The props are more like screws on a ship, and not
well suited to that kind of craft.
-the town... I don't want to sound like an a-hole, but I wasn't moved. You
can do better than stock buildings like the police station. Your own design
will alway, ALWAYS be better than legos. I did like the gun/bunker emplacement.
So there is your honest feedback. I hope it was helpfull. If you take
anything away from this, let it be positive. Your work shows great promise,
and you should keep at it. It is better than alot of stuff out ther.
Cheers, and keep building...
-Keith
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| (...) That was my 2nd most recent MOC...some improvement with practice, eh? (...) Yeah, I was scraping the bottom of the parts bin when i made that one, couldnt afford to waste pieces on a fender..would have liked one though. (...) Yeah, i wanted to (...) (21 years ago, 24-Apr-03, to lugnet.space)
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