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My lego rpg story, amongst others...
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lugnet.castle, lugnet.general
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Thu, 21 Nov 2002 00:20:35 GMT
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I noticed there wasn't much activity here at
.castle, so I decided to go along and present
to you, one of my lego RPG stories, for your
enjoyment...
I just recently completed a text only
excerpt from my work in progress. Of course,
I'll have the beginning chapters and progress
to mention on the way as well...
These are, of course, spoilers, so if you
wish to start from the beginning, I'll include
the text version, perhaps later this month...
Anyway, without further ado,
Part One of the fourth chapter excerpt...
http://www.lugnet.com/~1112/Fantasy/Blackford
And of course, part two...
http://www.lugnet.com/~1112/Fantasy/Phoenix
Your comments are more than welcome.
Hope you enjoy the read (long, wasn't it?)
<<_Matt Hein_>>
Fellow lego enthusiast
Or email me comments at Pyrokid17@hotmail.com
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| i usually don't read stories without lego, but i'd like to comment a further piece of advice to make your work more approachable. simply put, your paragraphs are too long. i see a screen's worth of solid text and i blank out. if you could divide (...) (22 years ago, 21-Nov-02, to lugnet.castle, lugnet.general)
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