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Re: Kingdom of Gatimrja - Chapter II
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lugnet.castle
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Thu, 11 Jul 2002 16:25:12 GMT
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great story! excellent use of simple backgrounds!
criticism: the whole thing about the prince. it pops up at the end of chap. 1
and ends shortly into chap. 2. hopefully this means its not a dead subplot,
because i don't see where its going. also you say the prince is annoying, but
don't show us. what was he doing that was so annoying, etc? make it so we feel
the annoyance the same as the other characters.
aside from that and excellent contribution to an excellent burgeoning saga!
i look forward to more!
-lenny
In lugnet.castle, William Movish writes:
> The next chapter in my castle story is up.
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> You can see it at:
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> http://home.earthlink.net/~ynpw/index.html
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> It's accessible directly from the Updates section on the main page, or from
> the Stories page.
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> As always, comments and criticism are appreciated. Let me know what you • think.
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> --William
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| Thanks for the comments. Fear not, the Prince will return. I've gotten a lot of positive reactions to him, so I have no plans to cut him out of the story. Unfortunately, there are two more chapters before he comes back into the picture. Although, I (...) (22 years ago, 11-Jul-02, to lugnet.castle)
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| The next chapter in my castle story is up. You can see it at: (URL) accessible directly from the Updates section on the main page, or from the Stories page. As always, comments and criticism are appreciated. Let me know what you think. --William (22 years ago, 11-Jul-02, to lugnet.castle, lugnet.announce)
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