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Re: Kingdom of Gatimrja - Chapter II
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lugnet.castle
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Thu, 11 Jul 2002 19:13:26 GMT
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Thanks for the comments.
Fear not, the Prince will return. I've gotten a lot of positive reactions
to him, so I have no plans to cut him out of the story. Unfortunately,
there are two more chapters before he comes back into the picture.
Although, I might try to re-introduce him sooner, either in a side chapter,
or by cutting back and forth between him and the main action. I also need
to do a bit more with Duke Folquets.
You're right though, there wasn't enough done to show why everyone was so
flustered with Herold. I will try to add more to the chapter to make up for
this.
I had been trying to keep these first few chapters as short as possible,
because really, they're just exposition. I was afraid they would devolve in
to a long series of mini-figs just standing around and talking, which is not
the most interesting use of lego (well, depending on the dialogue, i rather
like it, but I am trying to keep it at a minimum, as it's not everyone's
favorite part of lego stories). I see that I may have erred on the side of
too little. I will try to keep the additions interesting, though.
--William
http://home.earthlink.net/~ynpw/index.html
In lugnet.castle, Leonard Hoffman writes:
> great story! excellent use of simple backgrounds!
>
> criticism: the whole thing about the prince. it pops up at the end of chap. 1
> and ends shortly into chap. 2. hopefully this means its not a dead subplot,
> because i don't see where its going. also you say the prince is annoying, but
> don't show us. what was he doing that was so annoying, etc? make it so we feel
> the annoyance the same as the other characters.
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> aside from that and excellent contribution to an excellent burgeoning saga!
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> i look forward to more!
> -lenny
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