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In lugnet.castle.org.cw, Chris Barker writes:
> Whatta troll!!! • Thank you. I appreciate my work.
>
> Chris Barker
> chris@superfami.com
>
> Bryan wrote:
>
> > In lugnet.castle.org.cw, Jesse Alan Long writes:
> >
> > > In lugnet.announce, Kevin Maynes writes:
> > >
> > > > X-P'd to:
> > > >
> > > > .announce because it seems appropriate somehow
> > > > .castle.org.cw because plenty of story stuff goes on there - I hope I'm not
> > > > being too presumptuous
> > > > .castle.ninja because, well, it'll be obvious momentarily
> > > >
> > > > Greetings all.
> > > >
> > > > I had the thought quite some time ago to put together an online sequential art
> > > > piece (read: comicbook). So I commissioned a script from my Brother the Writer,
> > > > allowing carte-blanche - all he had to do was keep it within a certain length.
> > > > What I got a few months later was Instalment One of The Wanderer.
> > > > Well, it sat for quite some time (several more months) before I got 'round to
> > > > working on it, but I did finally get to it over the last few weeks. It's hardly
> > > > top-shelf material, but I didn't want to spend TOO much time on it either -
> > > > it's been waiting long enough.
> > > > A lot of the panels might a bit huge, so forewarned is forearmed. I've got it
> > > > set up so that you can decide from the Page view which Panels you want to see,
> > > > or just click right on through them all if you like. I'm curious how the
> > > > interface works out for people.
> > > > There's only one instalment so far, though my brother's been making noises of
> > > > three more. We'll see whether it's warranted to develop them further.
> > > > Anyway, you can get to it by clicking [The Wanderer] link found here;
> > > >
> > > > http://www.kmaynespaint.com/Pages/SiteStructure/Subsidiaries.html
> > > >
> > > > We now return you to your regularly scheduled Lugnetting. :)
> > > > Thanks for your time.
> > > > KMaynes
> > >
> > > I like your story but I feel that the excess blood in the story is too
> > > reminiscent of Mortal Kombat and too many anime scenes in anime so I believe
> > > that if you want an equally effective scene, you should use angles in your
> > > work. I love the overall story but you need to use more angles instead of
> > > more blood. You should also try to use more of the environment in your
> > > fighting scenes and also try to let The Wanderer bash some people together
> > > instead of goring people. Most thieves, pickpockets, and other petty thugs
> > > understand the general idea that once they have been severely beaten that
> > > they will not try to destroy that person. These are merely my opinion so
> > > until the next issue, I have the feeling that Matchlock and company will not
> > > be very happy when they meet The Wanderer.
> > > Jesse Long
> >
> >
> > I must say your story sucks. I don't care what most poeple say. It sucks.
> > Yes , i'm entitled to my own opinion. And it is that your story sucks ass.
> > Your'e probably all thinking "oh my gawd noone on Lugnet has said this to
> > anyone before" but you know what? I did.
> > I'm so sick of these stories that are like "if I have excessive gore and
> > eye candy then I don't need a real story or next to any dialogue because the
> > reader will be focused on the action." And what the hell is the story? In
> > feudal Japan some Raiden wannabe wanders around and kills people. Does he
> > have a motive? We are not told. Why does he kill thiefs and small time
> > criminals? Read the first part of this paragraph. And another thing is the
> > dialogue it does have is utterly horrible. And whats with the guy who keeps
> > thinking "Oooh what a big stick." It seems your attempts at petty humor
> > have fallen flat. The comic concept isn't even very new , iv'e seen it used
> > before. Also illustrating it completely shows that you must have next to no
> > talent for writing. Don't write another chapter into this Wander "online
> > image novella." How pathectic , your'e trying to make a comic sound fancy.
> > Don't write another chapter , I don't want to see anythign else added to
> > this hunking pile of bullcrap. You suck. Stick to building , because you
> > obviously can't write.
> >
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