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Re: History of Tarharis
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lugnet.castle
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Wed, 27 Feb 2002 12:51:46 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, Kevin Wanner writes:
> The Knight's Sword
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> A violent battle had occurred, the Royal Knights Castle was almost lost to
> the Dark Lord. He stood and watched. He was in black armor and had a long
> black sword. He walked toward the massive, wood doors and watched them
> chopped down. The iron portcullis was supported up and the Dark Lord walked
> into the castle. He hacked through the men and made his way to the outer
> wall. When he got on top of the wall, he continued attacking. With one
> swing, three men went flying. When the wall was cleared off, he made his way
> to the throne and killed the king.
> Three months later the Dark Lord and some of his men left on an expidition.
> They never returned.
> One month later the Royal Knights gained control of the castle.
> Two thousand years past and little happened. Forteen years later, a boy
> was born. His name Valdimir.
> --Kevin W. §
Kevin,
Sounds like a great start for a story! A lot of time went by in between...
But I like how you end the history with a boy being born. It gives people a
sense of expectation and foreshadowing, perhaps, that he is bound for
greatness... but whether it be good or evil, we can only assume. Good start,
hope to see more in the future.
-Shiri
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