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Re: Epic of the Beyhadur: The Calling
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Fri, 7 Feb 2003 01:23:28 GMT
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In lugnet.castle, Leonard Hoffman writes:
> Chapter 2: The Calling
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> http://www.lugnet.com/~1168/beyhadur/
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> Thoughts, criticism, and ideas are strongly requested.
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> Hopefully Chapter 3: the Rising will be done next week, but don't hold your
> breath.. thats the long one.
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> _lenny
i looked at your epic and.....
Totally did not understand it. I do not see what the guy in the black and the
king saying "urk" have to do with each other...the font is rather hard to read,
and it has alot of reffering to "god."
It needs more background, and a base for what exacty is going on, as well as a
smoother font.
As for the comic book style, i dont particularly like it. (thats just me, my
epic will not be in pictures, to many restrictions to just pictures.)
My criticism, as you asked, is above.
Eaten by a lego brick;
Aramir
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| (...) Setare (the king) said 'urk' because he suddenly got sick, in accord with Zahan's prophecy (the guy in black) that God would kill him for his wrong-doing. Setare was being punished by God directly, not by Zahan. And I know certain parts seem (...) (22 years ago, 7-Feb-03, to lugnet.castle)
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